Sunday, September 16, 2012

Krystal Shannan - Six Sentence #20 - WIP - PRIDE RULES

Welcome back. Here's the next bit from Darren and Eshe's story, PRIDE RULES. Hope you enjoy. Be sure to visit www.sixsunday.com for more great snippets.

“Correction,” she snapped viciously, “Half-breed and not worthy to be called a lion.”
He stood silent. Eshe waited for him to say something, but he didn’t. He just stood there staring at her.
Finally he broke the silence. “He said you weren’t a shifter, but I didn’t believe him.

7 comments:

  1. Ouch...talk about tension. Great six!

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  2. I agree. There is a lot of tension there. Nice six! :)

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  3. Nicely done. The conflict rolls from each line. I like the contrast between her knife-like anger and what I sense is quiet study in his reply. Lovely.

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  4. Interesting excerpt, a lot of emotion at play in such a short span of time! Great six!

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